Post by voldemortservant on Jul 19, 2011 14:58:54 GMT -5
Hi everyone! I'm Simi, and I'm new here. This is my first fan fiction, and I hope to get lot's of constructive criticism so I can make my writing better! So here it goes:
Chapter 1-
Bellatrix Lestrange was the first one to speak.
"My Lord" she said "The boy has been given very strong protection by the Order"
"I MUST HAVE THE BOY!!" Voldemort screamed. "Where have they hidden Harry Potter?"
"My Lord" Lucius Malfoy spoke up "It's the Weasleys'"
Voldemort laughed. it was such a laugh that sends chills down your spine.
"Bellatrix" Voldemort said. Bellatrix raised her head.
"My Lord?" she asked.
"You are to accompany Lucius, Dolohov, Yaxly, and Greyback, go to the Weasleys' and get me the girl!" Voldemort ordered.
"The girl, My Lord?" Bellatrix asked.
"The Weasley girl, my dear Bella, the Weasley girl" Voldemort replied. "We are going to use the girl. Then Harry Potter will come to me!"
Bella. He had said her name in short form. And she always loved it. He only says that when he's very happy. That made Bella happy.
"Don't fail me this time Bellatrix" Voldemort hissed. Bella hung her head. She knew he was recalling the time when she had failed to bring him the Prophecy.
"Yea, My Lord" she said.
Next evening....
"My Lord" Lucius said.
"NO!" Voldemort screamed. "I've had enough of your excuses! I asked for you to get the girl!! And yet, you have failed me again."
The Dark Lord was at rage.
"OUT!" he screamed "GET OUT, ALL OF YOU!!"
Everyone stood up from their chair. "Except for you Bellatrix"
Bellatrix sat back down. When the last person had left, slamming th door shut, he said "You have failed me again!"
Bellatrix got up and fell to her knee at his feet.
"My Lord..." she said softly. Voldemort got up and stared at the wall turning his back on her. Bellatrix got up. "My Lord...." she said again. Voldemort turned around, clearly blinded by his rage and very annoyed, grabbed Bella by her neck and slammed her against the wall. It was such a sudden movement that it took a while Bellatrix to realize what had happened. A hot tear rolled down her cheek. Voldemort immediately regretted what he had done. She whimpered. Voldemort turned his back on her again and said "Do you wish for me to fail Bella? Do you wish to see your master destroyed? Do you?"
"N-no My Lord. I would never--" but Voldemort silenced her raising his hand. "Then why do you fail me every time?" he asked.
For once Bellatrix had no explanation. It was completely her fault. She remained silent waiting for her punishment. Voldemort turned around pointing his wand at her. "Crucio!"
Bellatrix could fell pain, yes, but this time it was different. It was weak. Not as strong as the Dark Lord's usual Cruciatus Curse. He lifted the curse quickly. Bellatrix whimpered again. He looked at her. Her pale, beautiful face. Her silky, smooth hair. Her eyes, her lips.
"NO!" he thought to himself. "Emotions make people weak! After all, she is merely a --"
Bellatrix started to sob. She sobbed harder. He wanted to help her, comfort her, touch her, hug her, kiss her, protect her; but he couldn't. Not here, not now.
Chapter 1-
Bellatrix Lestrange was the first one to speak.
"My Lord" she said "The boy has been given very strong protection by the Order"
"I MUST HAVE THE BOY!!" Voldemort screamed. "Where have they hidden Harry Potter?"
"My Lord" Lucius Malfoy spoke up "It's the Weasleys'"
Voldemort laughed. it was such a laugh that sends chills down your spine.
"Bellatrix" Voldemort said. Bellatrix raised her head.
"My Lord?" she asked.
"You are to accompany Lucius, Dolohov, Yaxly, and Greyback, go to the Weasleys' and get me the girl!" Voldemort ordered.
"The girl, My Lord?" Bellatrix asked.
"The Weasley girl, my dear Bella, the Weasley girl" Voldemort replied. "We are going to use the girl. Then Harry Potter will come to me!"
Bella. He had said her name in short form. And she always loved it. He only says that when he's very happy. That made Bella happy.
"Don't fail me this time Bellatrix" Voldemort hissed. Bella hung her head. She knew he was recalling the time when she had failed to bring him the Prophecy.
"Yea, My Lord" she said.
Next evening....
"My Lord" Lucius said.
"NO!" Voldemort screamed. "I've had enough of your excuses! I asked for you to get the girl!! And yet, you have failed me again."
The Dark Lord was at rage.
"OUT!" he screamed "GET OUT, ALL OF YOU!!"
Everyone stood up from their chair. "Except for you Bellatrix"
Bellatrix sat back down. When the last person had left, slamming th door shut, he said "You have failed me again!"
Bellatrix got up and fell to her knee at his feet.
"My Lord..." she said softly. Voldemort got up and stared at the wall turning his back on her. Bellatrix got up. "My Lord...." she said again. Voldemort turned around, clearly blinded by his rage and very annoyed, grabbed Bella by her neck and slammed her against the wall. It was such a sudden movement that it took a while Bellatrix to realize what had happened. A hot tear rolled down her cheek. Voldemort immediately regretted what he had done. She whimpered. Voldemort turned his back on her again and said "Do you wish for me to fail Bella? Do you wish to see your master destroyed? Do you?"
"N-no My Lord. I would never--" but Voldemort silenced her raising his hand. "Then why do you fail me every time?" he asked.
For once Bellatrix had no explanation. It was completely her fault. She remained silent waiting for her punishment. Voldemort turned around pointing his wand at her. "Crucio!"
Bellatrix could fell pain, yes, but this time it was different. It was weak. Not as strong as the Dark Lord's usual Cruciatus Curse. He lifted the curse quickly. Bellatrix whimpered again. He looked at her. Her pale, beautiful face. Her silky, smooth hair. Her eyes, her lips.
"NO!" he thought to himself. "Emotions make people weak! After all, she is merely a --"
Bellatrix started to sob. She sobbed harder. He wanted to help her, comfort her, touch her, hug her, kiss her, protect her; but he couldn't. Not here, not now.