*ophelia*
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*Bellatrix Lestrange* "only room for one half blood in her life"
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Post by *ophelia* on Mar 27, 2008 9:33:15 GMT -5
Hey, I've done a poem, it's before they had dark marks, sorry about the rhyme, it's not perfect. It wasn’t supposed to rhyme, it just sort of fell in. Oh, and with the ending it just meant he didn’t follow his heart, just his brain. Hope you like it!
What if I need you? And what if you've gone? How can I find you? I need to know.
He asked his dark mistress, A question of faith. Would she be there forever? Whatever it takes?
Well my dark master, Just give a cry. My heart will hear you, And to you I’ll fly.
She replied with sentiment, She replied and felt. Her lord, no feeling, Yet her heart, he could melt.
Yes my sweet Bella, I’ll whistle down the wind. And soon you'll be near me, A very special thing.
He said not what he felt, And felt not what he said. For he was the dark lord, Who had not heart, just a head.
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*ophelia*
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*Bellatrix Lestrange* "only room for one half blood in her life"
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Post by *ophelia* on Mar 27, 2008 9:37:12 GMT -5
OMG, italics didn't work. I think you should work out what are the speaking parts anyway. I actually am doing this at school, the poem too. I wrote it at home but remembered it. The teacher didn't come to the lesson. I hate school computers, they're just silly!
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Post by wickedwitch on Mar 27, 2008 14:09:22 GMT -5
Wow, that's a great poem! I think you captured both their feelings very well. I hope you can figure out the italics! But it's great anyway, very nice job!
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*ophelia*
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*Bellatrix Lestrange* "only room for one half blood in her life"
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Post by *ophelia* on Mar 27, 2008 15:45:20 GMT -5
Thanks, I'll work on the italics!
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artemis1979
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Post by artemis1979 on Mar 28, 2008 12:00:49 GMT -5
Yeah, I could figure out the speaking parts without the italics, so no worries there. It's very simple, but it communicates what they're both feeling really well. I like the line "Whistle down the wind"... very dramatic imagery.
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*ophelia*
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*Bellatrix Lestrange* "only room for one half blood in her life"
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Post by *ophelia* on Mar 31, 2008 7:35:02 GMT -5
Thank you, I thought that the last verse kind of sounded a bit like Dr. Seuss, but that's just my idea. Did you think it did?
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zl
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Post by zl on Mar 19, 2010 3:48:13 GMT -5
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