a sonnet (or something like that)

[wickedbella]

Right... Yesterday, while I was learning for my test about the philosophy of Plato, Socrates, Pythagoras and a lot of other guys, I got surprisingly inspired to write a sonnet. Or something like that. We learned about sonnets with English. Well, this is not a real sonnet, actually. Let's say, it's a completely new kind of a sonnet^ ^. Well, here it is. Please tell me what you think about it, even if you think it's completely awful!!

The look in his red eyes
Does he really love me?
It's like he does, but he
Absolutely denies.

This thought spins like a mill
He'll say with all his heart
He loved me from the start
Although he never will.

He's way too insecure
To talk about the whole
Thing so unlike his role.

And so I'm really sure
It'll always be only
A lovely dream to me.

[wickedwitch]

Wonderful, Yvette! And in rhyme... well done!!! Well I'm learning about sonnets as well and in such cases school turns out to be actually useful But again, I love your new kind of sonnet, and I hope you are gonna write more!

[wickedbella]

Thanx Marian^ ^!!!! Yeah it's weird, but sometimes you learn useful things at school XD!! Oh I would love to write further on my fanfic, but I don't have much time for things I like lately *sigh*... And your poem was reeaally good!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Voodoo Dolly]

It'll always be only
A lovely dream to me.

What a sad and haunting line fabulous poem as always I think this is one of my favourites of yours.

[wickedbella]

awww thanx dearry!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Oh first I thought it was really bad, you know. I showed my friend this 'sonnet' and she was like: well, you're better at other things. And she's a Bella fan too, so it's not because she doesn't like Bella.
But now I feel way better, thanks to you and Marian!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
So thanx for that!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
But now I think I'm going to leave. I'll go to bed early this night, or at least try to do that. I haven't done that for ages (I always go to bed when it's between twelve 'o clock and half past twelve). And I get up often at 6 'o clock. It's not very healthy. Well I don't mean to do it, actually. It just happens...
Oh I'll see whether I can manage to go to bed early (don't thinks so, it's very hard for me:P). But hey, I'm just talking about things not interesting. So I'll stop with it.

[*ophelia*]

Awww, that was so cute! And the poem flowed really well! I love the new kind of sonnet, it seems to flow better than the ten syllable one too. Really amazing! Please write more!